One day I was trotting down a narrow street. It was a freezing cold day and I was watching the snowflakes landing on my nose. I was on my way to school. I found a blackboard with chalk so I wrote my name on the blackboard wondering what it was for. I turned around then I found a doll shop It was pitch black threw the window. A doll figure that looked exactly like me. I look down at my clothes the doll wore my clothes. I was confused but happy. I tried getting into the shop to grab the doll. So I got so vexed and threw a snowball at the door.
Then after I stomped away with fear and disgust in my lime green eyes. Then suddenly the door creaked open a teny bit so I shoved it open fully. My face looked like a frozen doll. I walked into the room to grab the doll. Suddenly I stood on an another doll that looked like slappy the doll but on a bicycle. So I let the doll free it looked like it wanted to warn me about something. But I didn’t care so I got back up and it dissolved.
It was on a higher shelf so I decided to escalate up, and so I did. Then when I reached for it My nightmare I had last night appeared. Then all before my eyes I was stuck in the doll.
Then I knew what the doll on the bicycle was trying to do. IT WAS TRYING TO…
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I like your story of the living doll your adverbs and everything ,but make sure you are making sense. You could of carried on the part when she's say I tried getting in the shop to get the Doll. Then you started a totally new sentence.
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